Loved this poem, L.G! The structure is incredibly unique. The third line in each stanza perfect captures that chaotic repetition of invasive thoughts all vying for your attention. As someone who struggles with similar mental challenges on a daily basis, you really captured it perfectly here.
This piece rises from erosion. Identity stripped by demand. Energy poured into spaces that never gave shape. Each line falls like weight—tasks, voices, aches—all carving at the core until presence thins to thread.
Brilliantly done!
Very good , I can relate to much of that
Loved this poem, L.G! The structure is incredibly unique. The third line in each stanza perfect captures that chaotic repetition of invasive thoughts all vying for your attention. As someone who struggles with similar mental challenges on a daily basis, you really captured it perfectly here.
This piece rises from erosion. Identity stripped by demand. Energy poured into spaces that never gave shape. Each line falls like weight—tasks, voices, aches—all carving at the core until presence thins to thread.
Brain blank
Mind muddled
Write write write